Friday, October 24, 2014

Where I'm From (Isn't Where I'm Going)

 Where I'm from - 

a ramshackle of a city,
in the midst of a frozen-over season,
to a house ever so gritty
and a family with no reason.

a childhood of mismatched streets,
apartments, swings, and video games
leading up to long naps under worn sheets
and nightmares full of flames.

mornings came, and seasons fade
all leading up to this day.
still yet we walk to that bittersweet parade,
never to reflect on the past with naivete.

Where I'm Going -

now summer nights are filled with heavy thoughts,
paperback novels, and my sister's sigh.
it's all a matter of casting lots
while my brothers are on standby.

memories remain evermore,
but dreams of rosin and string cast a flight
where others question whatever for
and those lights have never shined so bright. 

words left unsaid cast silhouettes
of hazel eyes like a ghost.
only to be spared by hopes of life's cadets,
queens and pawns searching for what they love most.













15 comments:

  1. I really enjoyed your diction and rhyming abilities. Great job Kat!

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  2. A poem full of emotion and feeling, from the Grand Master high points

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  4. I like the title of your sentence a lot. Also, your last sentence stood out to me a lot for some reason.

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  5. Kat, great job! I love the imagery I your poem because this very vivdly describes the environment in which you live.

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  6. I like how you used a simile to compare a ghost to hazel eyes.

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  7. I liked your simile on how "words left unsaid cast silhouettes of hazel eyes like a ghost".

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  8. I like how it rhymed and how it flowed really well.

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  9. I really like it good personification

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  10. I liked how you said where you were from then you said where you were going.

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  11. I enjoyed the rhyming that you put in

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  12. The words you used were understandable and a perfect fit in the poem.

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  13. I liked how you managed to summarize a few key points in your life within six stanzas. It's easy to picture and put yourself in some of the scenes you described thanks to all the small details in the poem.

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